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  • Liebe Forenteilnehmer,

    Im Sinne einer respektvollen Forenkultur, werden die Moderatoren künftig noch stärker darauf achten, dass ein freundlicher Umgangston untereinander eingehalten wird. Unpassende Off-Topic Beiträge, Verunglimpfungen oder subtile bzw. direkte Provokationen und Unterstellungen oder abwertende Aussagen gegenüber Nutzern haben hier keinen Platz und werden nicht toleriert.

Brauch Hilfe bei meinem Englischreferat

G

Gast

Gast
Hallo Leute, muss bald mein Englischreferat abgeben für den Quali. Würd mich freuen, wenn ihr das mal durchließt. Vielleicht habt ihr ein paar gute Idden was ich besser oder anders machen könnte.

Danke



About the history of music and my personal favourite music

In this report I want to give a lecture about the history of music in general and about my personal favourite music the minimally techno:

The history of music is already about thousands of years old. It is still unclear how the people musicality deleloped. Researchers see the origins of the music as a communicative adaptation to the life in bigger social groups. The most folks of the world understand the origin of music as the work of gods and ghosts. A life without music is unimaginable. Since on parties, weddings and in churches is music present. The question what music is or not is so old as the reflexion about music self. We understand them as rational, figure-related science, emotional art and as a pure theory or practise or as a unity of both components.
The first found instruments are boneflutes. They found it in a cave in the Achtal by Blaubeuren. They were produced about more than 35000 years ago of bird's bone and mammoth's ivory. Early devices for making music were produced from materials like wood, metal, tone or animal skins.
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Specially my love pulls me to minimally techno, who is an experimental advancement of the traditional techno from Detroit. The first person who created this music sytle is the dj and producer Robert Hood. His album „minimally nation“ influenced much producers. The first german artists who catched and developed this music are Wolfgang Voigt and Stefan Brügesch. At the beginning was the minimally techno in the background but in the entrie of the 21th Century the music grew up to a popular club music. Because of the big paletts on successful labels how Kompakt, Poker Flat Recordings, Perlon, Freude am Tanzen oder Trapez is Germany an important centre of this music.
The typical characteristics of this music is the monotonic structure of the composition. With single tones, tone variations and irregularities is this music experimented. Astonishingly effects or melodies are implemented. This music has be the effect of hypnotic and can you invite to dance or relax. Strictly is the focus on the keynote.
Successful Artists in Germany are Dominik Eulberg, Matthias Tanzmann, Wolfgang Voigt, Steve Bug, Thomas Brinkmann, Florian Meindl. Worldwide count Richie Hawtin, Ricardo Villalobus, Magda, Robert Hood.
 
Hallo Leute, muss bald mein Englischreferat abgeben für den Quali. Würd mich freuen, wenn ihr das mal durchließt. Vielleicht habt ihr ein paar gute Idden was ich besser oder anders machen könnte.

Danke



About the history of music and my personal favourite music

In this report I want to give a lecture about the history of music in general and about my personal favourite music the minimally techno:

The history of music is already about thousands of years old. It is still unclear how [the(the people=das Volk, people=Die Leute)] people [musicality] deleloped musicality. Researchers see the origins of the music as a communicative adaptation to the life in bigger social groups. [The] most folks [of] in the world understand the origin of music as the work of gods and ghosts. A life without music is unimaginable. Since on parties, weddings and in churches [is] music is present. The question what music is or not is [so] as old as [the] reflexion about music itself. We understand them [bezieht sich worauf??] as rational, figure-related science, emotional art and as a pure theory or practise or as a unity of both components.
The first found instruments are boneflutes. They were found [it] in a cave in the Achtal by Blaubeuren. They were produced [about] more than 35000 years ago of bird's bone and mammoth's ivory. Early devices for making music were produced from materials like wood, metal, tone or animal skins.

[Specially] my love pulls me to minimally techno, [who] that is an experimental advancement of the traditional techno from Detroit. The first person [who] that created this [music] sytle is the dj and producer Robert Hood. His album „minimally nation“ influenced [much] many producers. The first german artists who catched and developed this music [are] were Wolfgang Voigt and Stefan Brügesch. [At] In the beginning [was the] minimally techno was in the background but in the entrie of the 21th Century the music grew [up] to a popular club music. Because of the big paletts on successful labels [how] like Kompakt, Poker Flat Recordings, Perlon, Freude am Tanzen oder Trapez [is] Germany became an important centre of this music.
The typical characteristic of this music is the monotonic structure of the composition. With single tones, tone variations and irregularities [is] this music is experimented (soll heißen????experimented??). Astonishingly effects or melodies are implemented. This music has [be] the effect of hypnotic and can [you] invite you to dance or relax. [Strictly is] the focus lies strictly on the keynote.
Successful [A]artists in Germany are Dominik Eulberg, Matthias Tanzmann, Wolfgang Voigt, Steve Bug, Thomas Brinkmann[,] and Florian Meindl. Worldwide count Richie Hawtin, Ricardo Villalobus, Magda, Robert Hood.


hab nur Präpositionen und satzbau und nur grob korrigiert. Tip: becaus blablabla ist kein guter Satzbau, lieber umstellen.
Den letzten satz musste auch nochmal anders machen.

Bitte dran denken, wie im englischen der satzbau funktioniert!

Eckige Klammern []: weglassen
unterstrichen: einfügen
 
beside the good work of soulfire ....

zwei Tipfehller :

how the people musicality developed

the first person who created that style ...

dann noch :
Gerade den ersten Satz des zweiten Teils würde ich anders machen.

Specially my love pulls me to minimally techno, who is an experimental advancement of the traditional techno from Detroit. The first person who created this music sytle is the dj and producer Robert Hood

Das erste who geht nicht, das that von soulfire ist gut, which würde denke ich noch besser passen. Das zweite who ist meiner Meinung nach definitv richtig, da es um eine Person geht.

und zu guter Letzt :

in a cave in the Achtal by Blaubeuren

ich glaube kaum, dass die Stadt Blaubeuren die Relikte gefunden hat 😉
sollte heißen in the Achtal near Blaubeuren

Just my five pence und alles ohne Gewehr bzw. Gewähr

Schlumpf
 
beside the good work of soulfire ....

zwei Tipfehller :

how the people musicality developed

the first person who created that style ...

dann noch :
Gerade den ersten Satz des zweiten Teils würde ich anders machen.

Specially my love pulls me to minimally techno, who is an experimental advancement of the traditional techno from Detroit. The first person who created this music sytle is the dj and producer Robert Hood

Das erste who geht nicht, das that von soulfire ist gut, which würde denke ich noch besser passen. Das zweite who ist meiner Meinung nach definitv richtig, da es um eine Person geht.

und zu guter Letzt :

in a cave in the Achtal by Blaubeuren

ich glaube kaum, dass die Stadt Blaubeuren die Relikte gefunden hat 😉
sollte heißen in the Achtal near Blaubeuren

Just my five pence und alles ohne Gewehr bzw. Gewähr

Schlumpf


Ein Tipp: WWW leo.org ist eine hervorragende "Sprachenwebseite" - es gibt mehrere Foren.
 

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